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Dead Like You, Part 4

When they pull up into a suburban street on the outskirts of Richardson, Jensen slows down considerably. "I looked this up on Google Earth so many times," he says quietly. "I don’t even know if my memories of this place are real or if it's all Google images inside my brain."

Jared gives his knee a quick pat, but doesn’t say anything.

Finally, Jensen slides the car into a free parking spot next to the sidewalk.

"It's a couple houses down here," he explains. "I think I'd like to walk the rest of the way." He laughs. "Less of a chance to chicken out and speed off."

They lock the car – even though it seems pretty unlikely that someone would steal an old Chevy with so many new SUVs around – and walk down the street.

It's a nice neighborhood. Houses with double garages, painted in pastels. Well-kept front lawns with flower beds, oak trees and the occasional children's toy lying around. It's not so different from where Jared grew up, even if they and their neighbors were a little messier.

They reach a house that looks just like the others, painted in a light purple tone, but with both garage doors open because, apparently, the owners are having a yard sale.

Jensen's eyes grow wide, and he takes Jared's hand, pulling. "That's my house," he says, then corrects himself, "That's their house."

He has a deer-in-the-headlights look, and Jared smiles at him, hoping to give some reassurance.

"But that's good, isn't it?" he says. "It means that we can get a little closer without looking like creeps, maybe even talk to them."

"Yeah," Jensen says slowly. "Yeah. I suppose."

They walk up to the folding tables that hold box after box of stuff. There are toys and clothes and books, CDs and even VHS tapes.

Jared browses superficially, but mainly watches Jensen, who carefully goes through some stuff. After a minute, Jensen pulls out a kid's t-shirt with Minnie Mouse on it, and turns towards Jared.

"I remember this," he says, voice low enough that no one will overhear. "That was Mack's favorite. For a while, she wore it every time they visited me in the hospital." He smiles a wide smile, and it surprises Jared a little. "It's really them, Jared. They're still here."

They go through a couple more things, and Jensen points out stuff that he recognizes. He's poring over a stack of comic books while Jared rummages through another box of odds and ends, finding a Star Wars figure that looks pretty awesome. Jared's just about to show it to Jensen when someone snatches it from his hand.

"Hey," he says and looks up at the woman who took away his Yoda. She's around the age of Jared's mom with nicely done hair and a crisp white blouse with neatly folded-up sleeves over jeans she clearly ironed. He can't pinpoint what it is exactly, but he instantly knows she's Jensen's mom.

"I'm sorry," she says, "but that got in there by mistake. It's not for sale."

"That's too bad," Jared shrugs his shoulders, "it looks really cool."

"Yes," she smiles warmly at him, "it is pretty cool." The word doesn't really sound natural coming from her, more like she's quoting someone else. "Or at least our son used to think so."

Wow, Jared thinks, a minute into the conversation, and she actually brought up Jensen.

It's a great opportunity, and Jared's trying to think on his feet. Maybe he can get her to talk some more. He's good with people, he might pull it off.

He quickly looks in Jensen's direction, hoping for some kind of confirmation that Jensen's okay with this. Jensen doesn't even look at Jared, though, instead, his eyes are fixed on his mother, and he's already started to come over. Even though he's directly in her line of vision, she doesn't seem startled or shocked or does so much as a double-take. She's definitely unable to recognize him.

Before the silence can grow awkward, Jared makes himself smile back at her. "Used to think so? Did he outgrow Star Wars?"

"No." Her smile is a little wistful, but mostly full of affection. "He passed away a few years ago." She shakes her head. "But he never outgrew Star Wars. I don’t think anyone in this family does. I'm the only one who didn't really catch the bug, and I always feel a little left out." She turns the Yoda figure in her hands. "But my daughter will love that this turned up again. She made Jensen answer her questions with this thing for hours on end when she was little."

Jared looks at her, not quite getting what she's saying. "Questions?" he asks before he can stop himself, although he should probably ask about, well, Jensen.

"Oh yes," she smiles, "didn't you see? This is a Magic 8 Ball." She turns Yoda, so Jared can see the underside of the repulsor chair the little man is sitting on.

"Wow." He whistles. Right on the bottom of the chair, there's a viewing window for the 8 Ball's answers. "No wonder you don't want to sell this. It's really awesome. Your son had great taste in toys." He cuts a quick look at Jensen, who's standing slightly to the side of his mother, maybe a foot or two away, his eyes glued to her face as he listens intently.

"If you'd heard him banging on that toy drum-kit he wanted so badly, you wouldn't say that." She laughs a little. "Alan and I had to lock it away for a while because Jensen always wanted to practice as soon as he woke up. Trust me, a six-year-old's drum solo is not what you want to hear five o'clock on a Sunday."

She tucks a strand of hair behind her ear and looks away self-consciously, much like Jensen does sometimes. "I'm sorry, I didn't mean to bore you with stories of my son."

"You didn't. It's nice to hear." Jared decides to go out on a limb, stretch the truth a little. "My family recently lost someone, too. He was only twenty-one, and I'm really not sure how well everyone's coping." Unexpectedly, he feels like it's a little hard to swallow, like his throat's closing up. "It's good to hear from someone whose son is gone longer … that you still think about him, that you didn't forget him."

Jensen's mom gives him a look like she understands, maybe better than Jared does. She nods and puts the Yoda figure down, patting Jared's arm for a moment. "What's your name?" she asks.

"Jared."

"I'm Donna," she extends her hand, and he takes it. "It's going to be easier, Jared, I promise," she says. "I know that it doesn't feel like it sometimes – and we still miss our son, of course we do, and our children still miss their brother – but the good memories, they will stay with you, they're much stronger than the bad ones."

Jared finds himself nodding along with her words; they're good words, kind and truthful and they make something in him feel a little lighter.

"In my self-help group, they said that it takes about a thousand days to get over a loved one's death. That's three years." Donna seems to almost sense what he's thinking. "It may seem like a long time, but it's a really important transition phase, trust me. And it's not all bleak."

She picks a Christmas ornament from one of the boxes. "The first Christmas after my son's passing, I thought I couldn't do it. I thought it would be awful, and we'd all cry our eyes out. But then Joshua, our oldest, found a tape from a Nativity play he and Jensen were in." She turns the silver star around in her hand. "It made us so happy just to see him again." She blinks rapidly, and her eyes are shining. "Even though he forgot part of the lyrics and lost his halo half-way through."

Jared can't help laughing a little at that, and he sees Jensen's smiling, too. By now he's absolutely certain that Loretta didn't lie to them. It's not just that Donna doesn't recognize Jensen, she doesn't really seem to be able to see him at all. Otherwise, she'd have to notice that he's standing much too close to her, much closer than a stranger would.

"He's been dead for four years now, but he's still part of our family, always will be." She shrugs. "He doesn't come up in every conversation, but he does come up. And when Joshua got married last year, he left a place among his groomsmen empty in Jensen's honor." She shakes her head and smiles. "He even thought of it himself, and he's usually the type who gives me an ironing board as a birthday gift and doesn't understand why I'm not jumping for joy."

She straightens her shoulders and steps back a little. "What I want to say, Jared, is that you might not get over it in the sense that you'll forget, but you'll come to terms with the situation. And you'll learn to enjoy the memories, be thankful for them." She squeezes his hand again. "I'm sorry for your loss, but it will get better." She sounds sure, calm.

Jared smiles at her. "Thank you, Donna. I appreciate it. Very much." He's surprised at how much he means it.

In the corner of the garage, next to a surf board, there's a woman waving like she's interested in buying, and Donna turns in her direction.

After two steps, she stops and throws over her shoulder, "You know what? You can keep the Yoda figure. I'm sure Jensen would like a real fan to have it."

"Really?" Jared beams. "How much?"

"It's a gift," Donna says. "Just don't sell it on eBay."

--

An hour later, Jared and Jensen sit at a vintage school desk in Sonny Bryan's Smokehouse and eat some of the best brisket sandwiches Jared's ever had with coleslaw that's almost as good as his mom's. Yoda is sitting between the two of them.

"I still can't believe my mom gave you my Yoda," Jensen says between bites.

"Yeah well," Jared replies, his mouth still full, "I'm irresistible like that." It's entirely possible that he sprays some small pieces of meat across the table.

Jensen wrinkles his nose. "Yeah, completely irresistible. Especially with coleslaw hanging between your teeth."

"Be nice or I won't share my Yoda with you." Jared says, and takes another hearty bite. The truth is that he likes this, teasing each other back and forth. Jensen seems happy, relaxed in a way Jared has not seen before.

"Hey," Jensen swats him in the arm, "you already said I could have it."

Jared just shrugs. "I lied."

"I hate you," Jensen says, laughing.

"I figured."

It's still light out when they walk back to the car.

"I can't believe we've made it this far, that Loretta didn't stop us or anything," Jensen says and gets out the car keys.

"Yeah." Jared grins. "Maybe she's not as good as we thought she was."

That’s when he notices someone sitting on the hood of their car.

"Hello, boys," Loretta says.

They both stop in their tracks. After a moment, Jensen mumbles out a, "Hi, Loretta," and Jared follows suit.

She smiles at them and says conversationally, "Did you find what you were looking for?"

"Yeah," Jensen says, "I think so."

"That's good, honey," she says, "real good." Her voice sounds absolutely sincere. "Does that mean you two are ready to come back now?"

Neither of them says anything, neither one moves. It's like the moment's frozen, and Jared has no idea what's about to happen.

Then something seems to break in Jensen. "You knew?" he asks, voice cracking and too high. "You knew all along?"

Loretta nods. "I did."

Jensen's face scrunches up, confused, maybe angry, too. "But what about the rules? You said we couldn't see our families, that it would be bad for them, not just for us." He's almost shouting now. "Why did you let us leave anyway, why did you take that risk, why did you let me get back here?"

She sighs, and takes his arm. "Let me buy you two some coffee."

--

It's a shock to learn that Loretta intentionally let them go, like she had wanted Jensen to come here, to see his family. But why would she? And if she had, why didn't she just tell him he should go? Jared just can't make sense of it all.

A few minutes later, tucked away in a corner booth with a steaming cup of coffee in front of her, Loretta explains herself to them. "I never lied to you, boys. Never." She takes a sip. "Once you're dead, you can't go back home for everyone's sake. It's not just that it's upsetting for us as reapers – it also keeps the living from letting go."

Jensen hasn't even tasted his coffee yet; he just holds on tightly to the mug.

"It's like with our clients. If the soul of the deceased is still around, the living feel it – and it makes them hold on." She looks at both of them meaningfully. "And a reaper's presence is much stronger than a regular soul's."

"Why's that?" Jared says, rubbing the straw of his milkshake between his fingers. Immediately, he wants slap himself. It's kind of a dumb question, and not exactly relevant.

Loretta answers him anyway. "Because we're not ready to leave yet, we're still tied to the living world." She pauses. "So when we find our families before they've made their peace, we make it that much harder for them. We make it almost impossible for them to let go."

Jensen's biting his lip and rolling his mug in his hands, not looking at Loretta. The silence between them is heavy, and Jared's afraid to even try and drink his milkshake for fear of making a slurping sound. He should have gone with coffee, too.

"So that's why you let me find them," Jensen says quietly after a while, "because they were already over me."

There's a flicker of what Jared thinks is pain on Loretta's face, and she reaches for Jensen's hand. "Oh honey, of course not. They will never be over you." She curls her hand around his. "What they are over is the loss of you. It's like your mom said – they went through the transition phase. Now, when they remember you, it's because they want to, because you're a part of their lives and always will be. Not because you're this great big hole in it."

The fact that Loretta knows what Jensen's mother said surprises Jared, but this is definitely not the time to bring it up.

Finally, Jensen takes a drink from his coffee.

"So," Jared says slowly as the meaning of Loretta's words sinks in, "that means I can't see my family, right?" He's surprised by how small his voice sounds.

"Not now, no," she says, patting his hand across the table. "But if you still need to when they're ready, I will tell you," she promises. "Most reapers don't want to. Once the initial impulse of wanting to go back is gone, they're happier keeping a distance between their new and their old lives."

She smiles at them. "But you're different. Both of you. It's a good thing, most of the time."

"Okay," Jared says, "okay." He's not even sure himself what exactly he thinks is okay.

When Jensen finally looks up from his coffee mug and catches Loretta's eye, it's unexpected. "Thank you," he says.

"You're welcome." Loretta smiles and then puts her empty cup down. "And what now? Are you ready to come back yet?"

Jared looks over at Jensen. He doesn’t want to decide this, not alone, so he just gives a faint nod and hopes that Jensen gets that it's up to him, that Jared's backing him up no matter what.

The thing is, Jared believes Loretta, and if he's honest, he wouldn't mind going back. Over the last months, his new life as a reaper sort of grew on him. He likes living with Jensen, their small, chaotic apartment with the comfy couch and meticulous kitchen. He likes his colleagues, too, the way they can make fun of each other one moment and help each other out the next. He even likes Robert with his mind reader-like waitressing skills and his big, fat crush on Loretta. And he likes the souls, likes that he can help people who have no one else in that moment. It feels like he's doing something good, something useful, something he's good at.

The only way he wants to go back, though, is if Jensen's in it, too. He can't imagine going without him.

Jensen gives him a quick smile and takes Jared's hand under the table, squeezing it briefly.

He turns his head to look at Loretta and says in a surprisingly strong voice, "We're coming back."

--

A couple of days later, they're back in Los Angeles, sitting in their regular booth at the Waffle House, almost like nothing happened.

Sure, Genevieve and Misha keep ribbing them about their 'great escape' and how they at least made it across the border, and Robert the waiter asks if they enjoyed their little road trip. Misha has also started calling Loretta a bounty hunter and both Jared and Jensen Dr. Kimble – which clearly isn't confusing at all. But other than that, it's a lot like before. Only better.

When Loretta hands out the Post-its this morning, she gives Jared and Jensen a sly smile and says, "I put you two back on shared assignments. I hope you don't mind."

Genevieve and Misha both snigger, and Jensen looks over at Jared with a cocky grin. In an exaggerated drawl, he says, "I don't know. Do you mind, Dr. Kimble?"

Jared's not sure what makes him do it, but suddenly, he has his hands around Jensen's jaw, pulling him close and pressing a quick kiss to his lips. "Not at all, Dr. Kimble."

For a moment, Jensen looks slightly stunned, but then his smile returns and he winks and snatches Jared's Post-it out of his hands. "So let's go. We've got work to do."

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Date: 2010-08-18 05:45 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] norwich36.livejournal.com
I've never seen Dead Like Me, but I enjoyed this a lot, and I was really glad Jensen got to see his mom.

Date: 2010-08-18 09:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
Thank you!

Even though I didn't take a lot from the show to begin with, it's still good to hear that the fic makes sense for people who don't know it at all.
Edited Date: 2010-08-19 05:07 am (UTC)

Date: 2010-08-18 07:49 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] z3s-keep-going.livejournal.com
i LOOOOOVE dead like me so seeing this made me sooo happy, and i enjoyed your version just as much as the tv show! ohh boys!

Date: 2010-08-18 09:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
Awwww. Thanks a lot. I'm glad you liked it.

Date: 2010-08-18 10:18 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] callistosh65.livejournal.com
This was such an entertaining read - thank you, I really enjoyed the tale you spun around the Js and cohorts as Reapers.

Date: 2010-08-18 09:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
I'm happy you enjoyed it. Thank you!

Date: 2010-08-18 12:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] klutzy-girl.livejournal.com
Awww, I loved this! I'm so glad Jensen opened up to Jared about his death and life. Also, yay for shared assignments.

This was a great fic.

Date: 2010-08-18 09:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
Thanks so much ♥

And yeah, shared assignments are the best.

Date: 2010-08-18 03:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] xiexiegirl.livejournal.com
This was awesome.

Also, wtf is it with every plot line I come up with, it shows up in the Big Bang this year? First the fallout AU, now Dead like me... :P

This was just awesome. And I love how you made it your own universe, not just borrowing from the Dead Like Me 'verse.

Date: 2010-08-18 09:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
Thank you. I'm so glad you liked the differences, even though you're a fan of the show.

And if you want to write something that's been done before: there's always room for more. The whole romcom genre is a testament to this. (And, come to think of it, pretty much every other genre, too.)

Date: 2010-08-18 09:41 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dugindeep.livejournal.com
Ohhhhhh bb. This was wonderful. Like I've said in other comments and emails, I was pulled right in with your narration and how light it was, but then when it got heavy, there was great respect in those moments. Like Loretta with the little girl, or the very end of Part Three and the beginning of Part Four. There was tension when it was supposed to be there, laughter and joy and excitement, and cranky Jensen! Who can't love all that!

Also, I think I've only ever cried in one other story ever, so you know, you've got that going for you.

&hearts

Date: 2010-08-18 09:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
Thank you so much, bb. I am so, so glad that the emotional moments rang true for you because i really wanted them to have an impact.

Also: I cherish your tears, every single one of them. I'm sure you cry as prettily as Jensen. ♥

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Date: 2010-08-18 09:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strokeof-genie.livejournal.com
Oooh, great story. I loved Dead Like Me, and this was a fun merge of RPS and the universe. I loved Jensen's story; it really made me think about how I would have acted in his situation. I loved that he got closure! Jared was wonderful; I loved how he wormed his way past Jensen's defenses.

Misha was fantastic, too. Hobo!Misha is a plus, always.

Date: 2010-08-18 10:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
I'm happy you liked the the story and that the resolution worked for you. It was fun writing the different characters, and it's great to know you got to care about them a little, too.

And I completely agree about hobo!Misha - he's my favorite Misha.

Date: 2010-08-18 10:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sigrundora.livejournal.com
Awwwww. I cried a bit in there.....especially when Jared was talking to Donna. I love Dead like Me and your version is just brilliant. I like how Jensen helps Jared there in the beginning without saying anything. And Misha's death was awesome.

Thank you :D

Date: 2010-08-19 03:21 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
Thank you, thank you.

I put a lot of thought into the emotional scenes, and I'm glad they resonated with you. I also tried to come up with my own ridiculous deaths (though I haven't watched the show in a couple of years, and my subconscious might have lifted a thing or two), so it's great you mention Misha's death. Btw, awesome icon :)

Date: 2010-08-18 11:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] corbyinoz.livejournal.com
I haven't seen Dead Like Me, so don't know how this compares - but this is a delightful story, beautifully told. I adored your characterisations. There were some very funny moments, and then some poignant parts that really caught at my emotions.

An absolute treat. And you probably don't want to hear this, since you've just finished this one, but I would love to read more stories about these two. There are so many possibilities! Where did Jensen transfer from? Why do these souls not have their own white lights? Do they ever earn them? How would they deal with a soul who refused to go? My mind kept taking me into these other paths. I would dearly love to see you explore them one day, if you were interested.

Great job - thank you for a thoroughly entertaining story.
Corby

Date: 2010-08-19 02:51 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
Thank you so much for your feedback. The balance between funny and emotional moments was important to me, so it's great to hear it came together for you.

I would love to read more stories about these two. There are so many possibilities!

I've never even written a timestamp, so I'm not sure there will be more, but I definitely agree with you that there is still potential for more. I actually went through most of what you mention in my head, even if my thoughts didn't make it into the story, and I love hearing that the fic made you ask the same questions ♥

Date: 2010-08-19 02:03 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] applepie-x0.livejournal.com
I really love this! :) ♥

Fantastic writing and such a cute, sad, lovely story! ♥ When Jared talked with Jensen's mom .. I totally cried. I also love the end, that the boys have both finally adjusted to their life after life. (if that makes sense ;P) ♥ ♥

Date: 2010-08-19 03:36 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
Thank you so much!

I'm very happy you liked the ending, too. I really wanted to leave them in a good, satisfying place. And yeah, everything you say makes perfect sense to me ♥
Edited Date: 2010-08-19 03:37 am (UTC)

Date: 2010-08-19 03:33 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] madame-d.livejournal.com
This is absolutely fantastic, all the more so because main characters are dead and yet, the plot doesn't tear my heart out and stomp on it. Plus, there's kissing. And road-tripping. And a really touching scene with Jensen's mom *sniff* And magic-8-Yoda (HA!!!)

I really love this; takes someone special - like the Js - to fall in love after they die. Heee!

Date: 2010-08-19 02:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
I'm really glad you liked this. Thank you!

Date: 2010-08-19 05:44 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] goldie3.livejournal.com
This fic was just wonderful. I've never seen 'Dead like me', so I was completely dependent on you for the descriptions. And you did great world-building there, as everything made sense to me. Since the unraveling (for a lack of a better word) of the world was through Jared's eyes, the information seemed a natural part of Jared's learning instead of an info-dump.

Jensen's enigmatic and mysterious quality was very enjoyable and that made his secret all the more tragic when it was revealed. The scene at Jensen's house between Jared, Jensen and Donna was beautiful. Loretta made an interesting, lovable matriarch type of person.

I thoroughly enjoyed this.

Date: 2010-08-19 02:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
Thank you for your thoughtful comment.

I'm happy it all makes sense to you, especially since the rules of the universe are pretty much all mine (there's no stand-by bodies, fleshing or connect on the show).

I put a lot of thought into the scene with Donna, so it's great to hear it resonated with you. And I'm glad you're mentioning Loretta because I like her a lot, and it was fun writing her.

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Date: 2010-08-19 06:52 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] katsheswims.livejournal.com
I really liked this. It was sweet.

Keep up the good writing!

Date: 2010-08-19 10:36 pm (UTC)

Date: 2010-08-19 10:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] elless18.livejournal.com
That was brilliant! I loved the evolution of Jared and Jensen's relationship.

Date: 2010-08-19 10:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
Glad you enjoyed.

Date: 2010-08-20 08:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] serenity-p.livejournal.com
That was great... and cute ;-)
I have never seen Dead like me nor I want to but your's delicious.
Thank you for this.
XXX

Date: 2010-08-23 02:04 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
Thanks a lot. I'm glad you liked it.

Date: 2010-08-23 06:44 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] teand.livejournal.com
I love Dead Like Me and you've done both the show and the boys justice. Enjoyed this a lot! Thank you.

Date: 2010-08-24 01:29 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
Thanks a lot. I'm glad to hear it worked for someone who loves the show, especially since I took so many liberties.

Date: 2010-08-23 07:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sadritsuka12.livejournal.com
awwwwe... sooo sweet..

Date: 2010-08-24 01:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
Thanks a lot. I'm glad you enjoyed the story.

Date: 2010-08-23 09:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] randomisedhabit.livejournal.com
So, I don't know Dead Like Me either, but oooh do I love the narrative voice you have going here! It's light but without missing depth. The dynamics between Jared and Jensen with a highlight of Jensen's characterisation and voice, and the way you manage to give it that important undercurrent of special trust, if you will, what with Jensen finally opening up to Jared of his own volition, is also something that I adore about this. The death scenes were all, uh, so very well done, sometimes just plain funny (Jared's own death!) or very touching, like Mimi's. I also love how you work with the factor of accepting death and your new job in the afterlife without making it too gloomy or melodramatic. You just have an overall lovely pace with great plot development and wonderful world-building going for you here which makes this story feel so well-rounded and coherent in its own right. I enjoyed reading this very, very much!

Date: 2010-08-24 01:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
After writing the first draft very quickly, I (and my beta) put a lot of effort into extending, editing and rewriting, so it makes me happy to hear you single out some of the things I was aiming for, like making Mimi's death emotionally resonant or a light, yet sincere tone for the narration.

Thank you so much for your comment and the thought you put into it.

Date: 2010-08-24 12:10 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] enablelove.livejournal.com
I really enjoyed this! I do love me some cranky, adorable Jensen.

I love how you gave each character their own distinctness and made all of them important, you know? Their pain and suffering and confusion felt real and wonderful. Thank you <3

Date: 2010-08-24 01:44 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
Yes, cranky!Jensen is probably my favorite - although I don't really write him a lot. Hm.

I'm glad you felt that all characters were important because they certainly were to me. Thank you ♥

Date: 2010-08-24 08:15 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] roxymissrose.livejournal.com
This was a very enjoyable read! I liked Jared's character very much--he was very sympatico. The questions that he had about his new life where the questions I had, and I like the way he came to understand what his job meant. Very moving, I thought.

Jensen was annoying in the beginning, a real prick, and even though I suspected he would very soon reveal himself not to be, you did a very effective job at making him a giant douche. I liked the way Jared slowly came to like him, just as I did. :) The way you revealed what made Jensen Jensen broke my heart, poor thing. And I *loved* that they were partners permanently.

I knew the basics of Dead Like Me, but even if I didn't, this story would have been just as enjoyable. Thanks very much for sharing this!

Date: 2010-08-25 04:29 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
I am very happy you bought Jensen as a douche, but that you still grew to like him along with Jared - and that you also felt with Jared as he slowly discovers what this new life of his is all about.

Thanks a lot for your comment!

Date: 2010-08-24 09:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deanawinchester.livejournal.com
Okay, I see you got a lot of detailed comments, sadly I don't think I'll be able to deliver one like them on my own, but I'll try :D
Honestly, you already had me with your warning: "Neither of the Js is any deader in the end than he was in the beginning, though." After that I just knew I had to read this. And you didn't disappoint me :)
As many others here, I haven't seen any of Dead like me (though, after reading this I'm sure as Hell going to do it), so I don't know what's in it and what's not, but I loved everything there was in this story. Mostly, when I'm reading longer stories, circa in the middle of it I'm like "oookay, it's fun, but I wanna know how it ends", but not this time. I was praying it would never end, and I was actually sad when I started to read the last part.
I love how you mixed your universe with the real life informations, and how you made sure to get the tiniest detail right. It's a beautiful job, you could be proud of it :)

Date: 2010-08-25 04:55 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
First of, thank you for your very detailed comment :) I appreciate it a lot.

It's interesting you mention the warnings because I had a really hard time deciding how to warn for this. I mean, it's a mostly lighthearted fic, but it also deals with some serious issues, and I didn't want to scare people away, but I also didn't want to downplay things.

I'm so happy you didn't think the story dragged and that I could keep you entertained till the end.

Have fun catching up on "Dead Like Me", and thanks again for your comment!

Date: 2010-08-25 07:24 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] candygramme.livejournal.com
Awww, way to make me cry buckets. This hurt a lot. My heart was in my mouth during Jared's encounter with Midori. Wonderful story.

Date: 2010-08-26 04:40 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
Thank you for your comment - and for pointing out the scene with Midori. It was emotional for me to write, too.

Date: 2010-08-28 12:50 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] withdiamonds.livejournal.com
This was such a fun story, in an angsty kind of way. I really enjoyed it.

Date: 2010-08-28 10:42 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
Thanks a lot!

Date: 2010-09-01 09:10 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jespretender.livejournal.com
This was brilliant! Really funny,and then really sad and moving.I loved your witty dialogue, one of my favourite BB's this year.

Date: 2010-09-02 08:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
Thanks so much. I'm happy you liked it.

Date: 2010-09-09 02:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] one-2-3-4.livejournal.com
I really liked this (cried a bit!) and the characters were absolutely lifelike. Well, as lifelike as reapers can be. I especially like that I didn't have to have prior knowledge of the show, it made this all that much more acceptable. Thank you so much for sharing this!

Date: 2010-09-11 03:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strangeallure.livejournal.com
"Absolutely life-like" is a wonderful compliment to get - thank you!
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